Hello!! Here today I have Piper and Todd to introduce one another through dialogue.
"I still don't understand why we have to have night games over here."
"Face it, Pipes. Your house is weird. And people kind of think you're weird because you never show them otherwise."
"Gee, thanks. Your new friends told you I'm weird?"
"They didn't have to."
"If I'm so weird, maybe you should just hang out with them instead."
"Don't be like that. You know I've always wanted to be on the team. You just have to put yourself out there. Talk to them instead of waiting for them to talk to you."
"Talk to them, sure. The kids who spend every second of their lives putting me down."
"I think they want to know if it's all true. The secret passageways. The floating door."
"But they can already see that. I mean, it's only on the side of my house."
"Come on, let them know who you really are. They think you're some closet freak."
"I don't know."
"They'll be nice. They're really cool."
"If you say so."
Ta dum! There's a glimpse of Todd and Piper!!
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I'm hearing British accents, but I'm thinking that's because I just watched part of Mansfield Park.
ReplyDeletei dont trust them either. its tough being different! good job!
ReplyDeleteI'd be hesitant to open up, too! : )
ReplyDeleteOoooo... Interesting, Cort! You mean, you've got projects up your sleeve that I don't know about??? *gasp* Can't wait to find out more! :D
ReplyDeleteIt's perfect! Love the dialogue, and love the relationship. It's so "spot on" with how high school is too. Love this!
ReplyDeleteFloating door, huh? Great concept. High school is a bit of a jungle, isn't it? Roland
ReplyDeleteOoo, sounds like one of the characters in one of the manuscripts I'm writing. A good person that people just don't understand.
ReplyDeleteVery cool!
I feel like I'm eavesdropping on a real conversation! Very fun and real :) Fabulous job!
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ReplyDeleteFun conversation - if I was Piper I'd take great pleasure in shunning the bullies at school! ;P
ReplyDeleteThis is one of a few piece of dialogue I have found in the blogfest challenge that I wished could be just a little bit longer! I am hungry for more :D
ReplyDeleteNice job. You really let me see them in this small piece.
ReplyDeleteYep, I'm in love with this house. Tell me more!!
ReplyDeleteGreat dialogue, Cortney :)
I really liked that! I wanted to read on!
ReplyDeleteI'm SLOW getting back to everybody! But thanks for stopping by, I love to read your comments!!
ReplyDelete@Joshua-Mansfield Park is so good! Lol, I've been watching Downton Abbey lately. Maybe that has something to do with it?
@Tara-It is tough being different! Thanks. :)
@Emily-Yeah, she definitely has it rough in the beginning.
@Morgan-Yep, these sleeves of mine...lol. Can't wait for you to find out more, too!!
@Leigh-Thanks a bunch!
@Roland-High school is definitely a jungle. And thanks!!
@Kelley-We must have good taste in our characters then! *winks* Thanks!!
@Angela-Yay, eavesdropping is good! Thanks!
@Jeremy-Thanks, I'm glad you like it!
@Trisha-She eventually does shun the bullies, and it's fun. :)
@Kyra-YAY! Thanks so much!!! That's always fun to hear. :D
@Jenny-Thanks!
@Juliana-Woo hoo, you'll get more, I promise! Thanks!
@J.A.-Thanks! I love to hear that! :)
Wow this was really good! This left me wanting to know more of the story! Great job :)
ReplyDeleteFollowing along!
They sound like really young characters. Are they young? If so, you've got a great voice for young ones.
ReplyDeleteThis made me really curious, wanting to know more. I thought they sounded young too, very natural and real sounding. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI'm very intrigued about her house. Great job! : )
ReplyDeleteHmmm, I'd like to know why she's so different and what is UP with that house!
ReplyDeleteI'm so curious about the house. Interesting.
ReplyDeleteLove this Cortney! I'm totally intrigued and I was all disappointed when I got to the end cuz I'm like... Wait! I want to know more! :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome!
I really like Todd and Piper. I think the make a cute couple!
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